Well, I can't really add comments on the picture itself, so I guess this will have to do.
Anyway, for a first sketch, I was pretty impressed. Anatomically, everything seemed proportionate and well-placed, so kudos on that. Ichigo's hair was definitely messy and Orihime's smile was beautiful. Wasn't quite sure why Orihime's eyes were closed, but then it almost made it seem like a 'candid camera' shot which worked for me.
Keep up the good work!!